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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)

TITLE: Say it to the Mirror
By Susan martin
08/07/07


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At first she seemed nice enough, but you can only take so much of someone who is insecure, needy and always seems to have a crisis. I’ve watched her many times from a distance, and I should say I am lucky that I am in this position instead of the poor ones who have to have her intrude on their personal time and families. She is like a leech that just attaches itself to you and you have to work very hard to remove it.

I have never met a person like her and to be honest I hope I never will again. I never had so much hatred and anger towards anyone as much as I do her. All I want to do is shake her and ask “Why don’t you just leave people alone? Why can’t you solve your own problems by yourself at your age?”

If I had the nerve I would walk right up to her and look into that pathetic face and just tell her to leave our organization and to watch from the audience. This group is only for normal people that don’t have to always ask for help when going through a small crisis. My goodness does she think she is the only person that has a problem?

No wonder her husband left her, her family doesn’t want to talk to her and her children avoid her. They are the lucky ones because they don’t put up with all of it. So her mom beat her all the time, sometimes I would like to smack her around too, because that is where I am at with her right now.

Sometimes I see her sitting in the back of the room by herself after a performance, I could tell she is just eyeing anyone that she can go up and work on them to feel sorry for her; I do very well to avoid her stare and her sad little ‘feel sorry for me’ look. Eventually she gives up, and after a while she leaves the room. Who knows or cares where she goes, but I know everyone can feel the tension leave once she is gone. Too bad she doesn’t leave permanently for everyone’s sake; maybe one day she will get the hint, but I doubt she is that smart.

Now she is staring right at me, I have had enough of this; the anger has finally seethed out and I can’t hold back any longer. As my knuckles crashes into the upper bone of her left cheek, the glass shatters everywhere including the artery of her right wrist.

The anger is finally gone; she will no longer be a nuisance to anyone any longer as she has finally got the idea to leave - permanently.


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Lynda Schultz 08/10/07
I felt the emotion and the despair which makes this good writing. Self-hatred, anger turned inward, assuming you know what others are thinking — and it's all bad. A sad story with a tragic ending. Better to say it all to God rather than the mirror. He never looks back in anger, only in compassion and healing.
Jacquelyn Horne08/12/07
This is very sad. I would have wished for a happier ending. But life doesn't alway end happily. A very good job of showing this emotion.
Joy Faire Stewart08/12/07
Oh! this is so sad. You can feel the emotions, anger and hatred. Very well written piece. Excellent title too.
Joanne Sher 08/17/07
Congratulations, Susan. Your entry has placed 11th in Level 2. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall are available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards.
Jeanette Oestermyer 08/18/07
An extremely sad piece, and told well. You showed us an angry person, possibly not understanding this girl's problem. Tragic ending written well.
Dee Yoder 08/21/07
This is so painful to read, but I know we all practice various amounts of self-loathing, maybe not to this extent, but we can be so hard on ourselves. If only we could be aware of the love that God has for each of us when we're in despair; we could realize how important we are to the Creator of everything!I could feel the intensity of the MC's pain.