The Official Writing Challenge
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08/03/07
I liked the "Devoid of Joy" for your synopsis of the word "sad". Neat! I would suggest less "I's" at the beginning of your sentences; you could turn them around to start with another word than "I"..but nice job! Thanks for sharing.
This is conversational and it feels intimate - good job