The Official Writing Challenge
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08/03/07
Intriguing story with good desciptions of characters.

So much is left out though; I'm sure for the word count limit.

Sept 10th leaves the reader wandering is there's a connection to 9/11.

What's the sad girl's story?

And why did you wish you had made a different decision to talk with her (for months)?

I liked the story very much, well written, I just want to know more - please more!

08/04/07
Extremely well written and very, very much - a page-turner; but I felt all the way through that the shy girl wouldn't be at the bus stop after 9/11; but the story went unfinished. Loved it from the Title to the unfinished ending, however. Good, No!...EXCELLENT job of writing, intriguing the reader and a mystery of an ending. Kudos!
I like the main character's final descision. The variety of characters was interesting. I wonder why Ruth didn't talk to the girl , though.