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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: I Feel
By Laurie Walker
07/30/07


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I feelÖdark.

A sadness ever creeping in

Regardless of how hard I try to block itsí path,

The dark consumes me.

I donít know why Iím so sad.

Things.

Lots of things,

Casting obscure shadows on the ground around me.

No matter where I turn,

Nor how quickly I attempt to escape

My constant companion,

I can never reach the light of the sun.

Ah, the sun.

I recall the way it would warm me

In only moments.

There was a time

I could bathe in its light.

Even when I closed my eyes

The light didnít go away.

It waited for me until I chose to let it in.

The brightness of it

Was at times overwhelming,

Yet welcome.

Now there is no light-

At least not for me.

I twist and I turn,

Wondering why it hides.

There are too many shadows.

Now when I close my eyes

There is no comfort in the thought

Of light just beyond.

It is only dark,

And I am lost in it.

I am sad.

I donít know why Iím so sad.

But it consumes me.

And I feel dark.


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Myrna Noyes08/02/07
Oh, this piece has such a melancholy aura to it! Your descriptive words evoked truly sad feelings in me.

I am a person who loves the light, so I really appreciated the folowing passage:
"There was a time
I could bathe in its light.
Even when I closed my eyes
The light didnít go away.
It waited for me until I chose to let it in."

Good job with this "Sad" topic! :)
Author Unknown08/03/07
This is a beautiful piece, speaks so much of how sadness feels-- also reminds me of S.A.D. (seasonal affectiveness disorder) but the overall tone reminds me of those I know who have suffered from depression. It's a moving piece. Nicely done.
Loren T. Lowery08/03/07
Really liked the way you were able to put your emotions into tangible terms we all could understand. While reading it, I couldn't help but think of how depression overtakes one exactly as you have so-well described.
Pamela Kliewer08/03/07
Well done. This made feelings of sadness well up in me also.
LaNaye Perkins08/04/07
I love how descriptive your words were. They perfectly describe how it feels when sadness overtakes us. Keep writing!
Cathy Kane08/08/07
Awesome!