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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: What happened here?
By Misti Chancellor
07/30/07


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The bright morning sun filtered through the mist that rose from the dew-dampened grass and gave a hazy quality to the chilly autumn morning. I paused to zip up my jacket against the chilly air, and then continued on to rejoin my friend on our walk.

“Where is it that we’re going? And what was it you wanted me to see?” I queried, as we walked. The dead leaves on the path made a whispering, crunching sound as they slid away from our feet.

“We’ll be there shortly, and you’ll see. It’s pretty hard to explain without seeing it,” she replied.

We walked on in silence, up a hill, around a bend, and into a clearing. The clearing was surrounded by trees and bordered by a babbling stream. The leaves on the trees were gorgeous yellows and reds that contrasted beautifully with the pines, cedars, and evergreens that grew nearby. It was as picturesque a setting as one might hope to find. Doubtless it had been painted by gifted artists in times past.

In the middle of the clearing, like a giant blemish on a beautiful face, was a large pile of stones, wood and broken glass that fanned outward from its center.

Turning to my friend, I asked the obvious question, “What happened?” She stood for a few moments, gazing at the pile as if lost in an old and painful memory; as she turned to answer me, I noticed that tears were sliding down her cheeks.

“This used to be a church. It was full of loving, caring, wonderful people. They were upheld as the model church in the area, the example of everything a church ought to be. But, something happened. At first, it seemed to be just a little thing. There was an occasion that should have been a happy one, where two individuals got cross-ways with each other. Each of them aired their grievance to others of their friends, and it just snowballed from there. People forgot about loving and helping each other, and began picking at each other’s faults.

“One Sunday, as they met together, one person said something derogatory to someone else. What you see in front of you is the result. You see how the rubble spreads out from the center? They destroyed themselves from within.”

We stood there for a while, silently viewing the pile of rubble and pondering the sad lesson it gave. I noticed a marker next to the rubble, and walked over to read it. It said:

“Here lie the remains of the little church that once stood in this clearing. They are a testament to the truth of this verse: ‘But if ye bite and devour one another, take heed that ye be not consumed one of another.’ (Galatians 5:15, KJV). Learn from their experience, and avoid their fate.”

We walked away from the clearing with the vivid illustration of that truth etched forever in our memories.


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Helen Paynter08/02/07
An unusual thought on the theme, and a challenging one. Some good descriptive parts, too. Well done.
LaNaye Perkins08/04/07
Such a sad truth described in this story. You did a great job of telling it.
Marita Vandertogt08/04/07
Great description of the countryside on your walk - almost felt like I was there. Good job.
Trevas Walker08/04/07
I really enjoyed reading this, and I like the descriptions that you used. Great job, keep writing!
Jan Ackerson 08/05/07
Ooooh, good one! Needs to be read before many a church board meeting...
Joanne Sher 08/07/07
Such a creative take on the subject. Your descriptions were very rich, and this was quite moving. Great read!
Dara Sorensen08/08/07
I too loved the descriptions in the story--I could feel the coolness of that autumn morning! Such a powerful message as well. ^_^
Caitlynn Lowe08/08/07
Some very interesting imagery here. Well done!
Seema Bagai 08/08/07
This is a keeper. I enjoyed the message in your piece. Everybody needs to read this before going to church this weekend.
Betty Castleberry08/08/07
It's unfortuante that this really happens in churches. What a great way to illustrate it. You gave me something to think about. Well done.
Julie Arduini08/08/07
Short but dead on, I'd say sweet but you hit the topic so well, this was definitely sad. What a sober reminder. Very well written!
Kristen Hester 08/08/07
What a great message. This is very convicting. Good job.


   
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