The Official Writing Challenge
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Really well done. Couple points though- did you mean sole? and at the end you raved, not raged? just really minor things.

I think you did a good job of pulling us inside your grief. Nicely written.

and a personal note, I often find myself curled up on God's lap or cradled in arms- it is indeed a very safe place.
08/03/07
Your loss was conveyed very well, the sadness in your heart spoke to mine. Good job.
08/04/07
A couple minor errors with word usage, such as sole instead of soul. But beyond that you have a very descriptive style of writing that draws a reader. Well done.
08/05/07
You did a good job of capturing the emotions of losing a parent. Well written.
What a beautiful story. We must be thankful that we have our Heavenly Father to turn to in sadness. God Bless
08/09/07
Congratulations on your win.
08/09/07
Wow.. Martha.. wonderful writing and moving story.. I guess we will be sisters in Advanced! Dianne