The Official Writing Challenge
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I thought this was good, I liked how it never "actually" says who he's complaining about, but that it alludes heavily. I liked the message and the extension of an already written story from the Bible. If you were to space out your paragraphs (someone told me this too) it would make the read look a bit easier on the eyes and probably more attractive to those looking for a quick and easy read! I liked it though! It was good, but too bad that guy just doesn't get it!
Post-modern prosperity doctrine isn't really all that new is it? Interesting insight into the rich young ruler's thought processes. Sometimes I see him as you portrayed, others as more winsome because of the statement that Jesus loved him and was sad because of it.
I meant to say Jesus was sad because the young man walked away.
I really enjoyed your entry. A great extension of a story from the bible.

Great job!
I liked this angle, too. I would ditto the comment on the paragraphing/formatting but sometimes it's hard to get that right if it's a copy & paste situation. Overall, pretty good :)
Very good peek into the mind of the rich young ruler.
It took a twice read for me to catch who it was. For a short article that may be a good write as it locks the reader into the prose, a whodunit mystery. In this read we hear the rich man's inner thoughts. Like a modern boomer he has to plan out his strategy, but God already had the plan in place. How sad for him.