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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sad (07/26/07)

TITLE: The Beautiful Toddler
By Becky Depp
07/26/07


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She is a beautiful Toddler,
Pretty in every way,
she may have her moments,
but I love her all the day.

Its hard to look at her,
with her beautiful dark eyes,
her mother is in trouble,
always having to say their goodbyes.

Its hard to hear her cry,
mommy don't leave me!
I close my eyes,
and I wish I could flee.

Every day was a struggle,
She acted out in every way,
she would be more difficult,
but all I could do was pray.

Finally the day came,
she was excited to see her,
when her mommy did come home,
but things were still a blur.

A short month went by,
and everything seemed OK,
but then the news broke,
which brings us to today.

Her mommy went away,
back into rehab she went,
for six months this time,
I wish she would repent.

Despite her mommy's problems,
she has nothing to with them,
she still is a beautiful toddler,
and she is quite a gem.

We laugh at her everyday,
she can sometimes be bad,
but today she isn't,
today she is very sad.


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Janice Cartwright 08/02/07
Though sin is not always the cause of suffering, i.e., the man with congenital blindness, [John 9], its consequence of pain often devolves on children and that is truly sad!
Trevas Walker08/02/07
Your poem fits the topic well.

It is sad when children have to suffer because of the mistakes of their parents. It can leave a child scarred.

I grew up surrounded by alcoholism and addiction. I know first hand the kind of problems it can cause for a family, and for a child of that family.

A well written poem about a very real problem. Great job!
Dee Yoder 08/06/07
It's very sad when a parent's problem troubles the child as portrayed in your story. Thanks for sharing this story.
Catrina Bradley 08/07/07
Perfectly on topic - great poem with strong emotions. Thank you for writing about this subject.
Janice Fitzpatrick08/08/07
Good job. Straight to the heart does this touching piece go! Well done!God bless the hurting people and the loved ones who are affected by the struggles and pain as well.Thank the Lord we serve a God who is faithful and promises us strength and power through Him.
Betty Castleberry08/08/07
Lots to ponder here. The message is very thought-provoking. I tripped a time or two on the meter, but overall it's a good read. Thanks for sharing.
Sara Harricharan 08/08/07
So sad! The last line sort of said it all. Good job!
Jeanette Oestermyer 08/08/07
A good poem, well written. It is so tragic when the parent(s) bring heartache to their own child. God Bless
LaNaye Perkins08/08/07
This poem does a wonderful job of relating the pain that children go through when parents don't do what is right. Bravo!
Julie Arduini08/08/07
You nailed the topic, what a creative way to do it too. Excellent.
Kristen Hester 08/08/07
I really like this poem. Even though it is a very sad subject, you handled in a very nice way. Good job.
Joanne Sher 08/09/07
Delicate and sweet and RIGHT on for topic. Poor little thing. Excellent writing!


   
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