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07/21/07
You certainly captured the frantic pace of that day - I was breathless just reading this! Great descriptions. And, of course, I LOVED the last line.
This was rather gripping, but I knew all would go well. I enjoyed the read, well done. God bless
07/22/07
Wonderful! Great! How delightful to hear the daddy's side, and so beautifully written. A lot of action, intense at times, with a good pace to keep the reader running with you to the end. Thanks for the story.
This was fun to read. You carry the reader right along with your descriptions.
07/23/07
I really enjoyed reading this from the Dad's POV, also. You did an excellent job describing the anxious hours leading up to the birth of your precious baby girl. Thanks for sharing this wonderfully happy memory!
Bravo. You described a happy moment indeed. I smiled at your description of how the father felt. You described it well. Very, very nice. Solid writing.
An excellent title for this suspenseful story. I loved it that "he" needed comforting.
07/25/07
I love the trail of humor here! Even though you keep the reader in suspense and we feel the fear of uncertainity, the note of happines at the end is just wonderful! I like the last paragraph best, it made me laugh out loud. Good job. ^_^
07/25/07
Great read from beginning to end! I love this description: "Those tears began to flow like a faucet". Thanks for sharing the man's point of view during labor and delivery. :)