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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: Daniel's Treasure
By Stephanie Craig
07/12/07


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When he woke up, Daniel knew that today was the day. He looked through the bars in his jail cell and could not hear anything. No one was around. He had been waiting for this chance for a long time. Today he could go get the treasure. Daniel broke out of his cell quickly and was very proud. This time he did not fall or make any noise.

It was still dark out. The dark had always been a little scary to Daniel, but this time he would just think about the booty that awaited him. He had been on this journey before but each time had been in the daylight. The treasure hunter stumbled around a bit but remembered the path that he traveled many times before.

Finally he reached the mountain. He had been at this point before, but never got to climb the mountain. Someone always grabbed him when he tried. The mountain above was a little bit scary. Daniel took solace in the fact that he made it through the dark with no problems. He also remembered that others had made the climb before him. That is how he knew where the treasure was. Sometimes they shared it with him, other times they enjoyed it while he watched. But he did not want to wait for anybody to make the climb for him. Today Daniel would go himself and enjoy his own treasure.

The mountainside was steep, but he found things to stack on each other and places to carve steps out of the mountainside. With each step, Daniel came closer to the top; the closer he came to the top, the more his excitement grew. On his last step, his foot slipped and footing underneath him collapsed. Luckily, he caught a ledge on the mountainside and was able to use it to pull himself up.

Unfortunately he made a lot of noise doing it and he woke up the guard dog. The dog stood at the base of the mountain barking and whining. The dog usually meant trouble. But today was Daniel’s day, so the dog could just keep making noise. He carried on with his business. After all, the dog could not make the climb up the steep mountainside.

As he tried to steady himself on the mountaintop, he found what he was looking for. The golden jar containing the treasure was right in front of him! Reaching his hands in, he pulled out all of the treasure his hands could carry. The excitement inside of him was too much to handle and it came out in a scream of joy. He held the treasure up in victory and got ready to jump down the mountainside.

Out of nowhere, he felt two hands grab his middle. How did she know where to find him? The woman put the treasure back in the jar and took him back to his jail cell. This time, she did not leave the cell, but was pacing back and forth in front of it, praying.

Out of nowhere, a man showed up and gave the woman a hug. “Honey, what’s going on?”

“He climbed out of the crib again. I found him standing on top of the kitchen counter with cookies in his hands and the dog barking at him. I think he was going to try to jump down. What are we going to do with him?”

The husband looked at his son and back at his wife before saying, “I don’t know. He is much too confident for a two-year-old. It will get him into trouble someday.”

“Who would have thought that too much confidence would be a bad thing?” The wife stroked her son’s forehead and smiled. He was already asleep, probably dreaming of his next big adventure.


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Janice Cartwright07/12/07
Really clever. At first I thought, "how strange" but I'm glad I persevered to the bottom of the page. I can truly relate as my first-born son was quite the "mountain-climber."
Seema Bagai 07/12/07
Cute story with good descriptions.
Dolores Stohler07/13/07
Clever idea! I thought this was very well done and never guessed it was a toddler having an adventure. This one has a great imagination. Is that realistic? Who knows?
Dee Yoder 07/14/07
An ending with a twist! Cute story.
Kristen Hester07/19/07
Congratulations on your EC win! This is so clever. I figured out that it was a baby breaking out of a crib, but I have a baby so babies are on my mind. Great job.
Sheri Gordon07/19/07
Congratulations on your EC. This is a cute take on the topic, and fun to read. Good job.
Mo 07/19/07
Congrats on your win!