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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Confident (07/05/07)

TITLE: Love Is Enough
By Mishael Witty
07/07/07


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The old man stood in the church’s parking lot and watched his nephew pace back and forth in silence. Finally, the young man sighed and squatted on his heels.

“Something on your mind?” his uncle asked, smiling.

The younger man glared. “Uh, yeah. Just the fact that I’m getting married in less than an hour!”

“So, what’s the problem?”

“Am I doing the right thing, Uncle Joe? I mean, I’m only 25. I haven’t done half the things I wanted to. And if I get married now, and then we have kids, I may never have the opportunity again. There will be too many things at home demanding too much time and attention.”

“Do you love the girl, Jim?”

“Well, sure, I do. I love her more than I’ve ever loved anyone in my life. I can’t imagine my life without her. But there are so many other things to think about and do with your life. Is love really enough to build a successful life together?”

“The right kind of love is.”

“Huh?”

His uncle stepped closer. “Let me tell you a story, Jim. When I was just about your age – a little older, actually, I was courting a young lady. She was beautiful and smart, and loving – everything a man could hope for in a wife. And she could cook – my goodness! Her blueberry muffins were the best I’d ever tasted – even to this day. One day, I asked her to be my wife, and she accepted.”

“What? I never knew you were married, Uncle Joe!”

The old man took a breath before he continued. “The wedding was set for the following spring. She wanted to get married before the June bride rush. Around that same time, I was offered a temporary position in a company in Taiwan. Amy begged me to turn the position down. There was no way we could move the wedding up in time to get married before I left, and we would have had to postpone the wedding for at least a year – until I returned to the States. Well, Jim, I thought I had all the time in the world. I had every confidence in myself that I could go to Taiwan, wow the company executives, and then come back and claim a higher position in my own company, so that I could provide a better life for our family.”

“So you went to Taiwan and left Amy back here?” Joe asked.

“Yes, sir. I did. My mind was made up. Looking back on it now, I’m not so sure if I was confident, or just plain cocky. I thought I had the world right where I wanted it. That is, at least, until Amy decided that she couldn’t spend her life with a man who would place his love for himself and his job above his love for her.”

“So she left you?”

The older man nodded. “I still remember the last time I saw her like it was yesterday. She was weeping into my handkerchief when she told me she couldn’t marry me. She said, ‘What’s going to happen to us now?’ ‘You’ll be all right,’ I told her, ‘and I will, too. I have faith in myself.’ The look she gave me then was one of total disbelief. Up until then, she had trusted in my love for her, you see, but I didn’t love her with the right kind of love.”

“What’s the right kind of love?”

“Self-sacrificing. The right kind of love is being just as conscious of your wife’s needs as you are your own – being willing to give up some of the things you wanted to do with your life in order to blend your life with hers. After all, it won’t be just your life anymore, Joe. When you walk out of that church today, you will be starting your life with Anna. Can you honestly say that you’re willing to do that? Remember, you might lose her, otherwise – just like I lost Amy.”

The young man lowered his eyes to the ground for a moment. Then he stood, turned, and headed toward the church. He glanced back over his shoulder as he walked.

“I do love her enough to do that. Thanks, Uncle Joe.”

The older man smiled. “No problem. I’m confident that you two will have a wonderful life together.”


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dub W07/12/07
Pretty solid essay. The opening confused me a little - space arrangements, but I generally liked the idea.
Dee Yoder 07/13/07
I like this story, also. I wonder how many young people give much thought to the selflessness of a successful marriage? This is a good article.
Nathan Perkins07/14/07
You have presented a very important point in an enjoyable read. If only young couples looked at their marriage with this mindset. You write with confidence!
Lynda Schultz 07/15/07
Terrific story, great lesson, and well written too. Good work.
Benjamin Graber07/18/07
Wow, this is a wonderful story... It is one of my favorites this week!
Kristen Hester07/19/07
Very nice. Good, believable dialogue. There is also a nice flow to the story. Thanks!
joe hodson07/19/07
Great pep talk. Your story flowed and was easy to follow. Great voice! I loved the "-my goodness" when the uncle remembered the blueberry muffins. The only thing I can think of are the first two sentences. I don't really know enough to tell you why, but I feel like it jumped too quickly from Old man/Young man. Maybe if you refered to him one more time as his nephew squatting down (second sentence), before identifying him as the young man. Take it or leave it - it's not enough to do any damage. Your story is well written, either way. And you did a great job in voicing your message.
Joanne Sher 07/19/07
Wonderful, wonderful message - and great job with dialogue! This was so compelling.
Dixie Phillips 07/19/07
Great plot! Excellent message! I really enjoyed it and kind of am hoping for a sequel...... You know where the Uncle meets up with Amy again at some point. Sparks fly.... Amy's husband has died and then you can write the REST OF THEIR LOVE STORY. Loved it!
Mo 07/19/07
Nice job, great message!
Sara Harricharan 07/20/07
Great writing! I loved the story and especially the dialouge between the uncle and his nephew. Good job.
Catrina Bradley 07/24/07
Great story- love the conversation. Good job with the dialog - very natural sounding. Great message too. A wise uncle, and a wise nephew for listening to his elder, too!