The Official Writing Challenge
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07/12/07
I so liked this piece! Boy, I could relate as one mother to another. Very well expressed
This Mother's Heart is every mother's heart I think. Well, maybe not all, but you certainly made my heart lurch and recall the baby steps too. We yearn to reach across that vast distance they place between us and touch them as when they were babes and then we know that is exactly how our heavenly Father feels when we distance Him.
Beautiful!

I wasn't sure if it was meant to be in prose. I read it that way.

Seperating lines a little more might help the read to flow.

I especually liked the imagy that you captured in regaurds to the teen years.

I work with parents and teens and have seen this again and again. You defined it well:

"I saw a leaf clinging to the branch as if resisting the change but eventually itís weakness against the strength of the wind forced it to let go. Like my teenager on the edge of respect and rebellion, in such conflict with himself and me, a delicate time of balance. A time of holding on and letting go."

You should be proud of this gift of writing that you have!
07/15/07
The concept, and your way of presenting this glimpse into a mother's heart, is really very, very nice. When everything important to us seems to fail, God never does ó and THAT we can always have confidence it. Blessings.
07/16/07
Wow.