The Official Writing Challenge
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"A hush fell over the land" I like this beginning, it says, now settle down and listen, here comes a story worth hearing. I like your descriptions "speckling the ground with darkened shadows" I love your description of the night sky: "Crystal light of suspended stars too numerous to count" just beautiful! "milky swth flow through...scattering light and sending it.." beautiful!
05/05/05
You really put us in the picture beautifully. This was a lovely read. Thanks.
05/06/05
This was a great "Christmas" entry from the shepherd's point of view. I enjoyed it very much. One little thing - I noticed you switched from past to present tense a few times - wasn't largely noticeable, but something to watch for.
Other than that, well done!
Blessings, Lynda Schab