The Official Writing Challenge
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05/02/05
A heart touching story.

Kathy
Very beautifully written. loved the view from the different eyes, the spindly legs. glad the dad came home. It would be a wonderful world if little girls didn't have to have such wise eyes at that age...I always remember that when something breaks my heart...God died to make it all better. P.T.L
This was a touching story. My only suggestion: Elaborate, give more details. I know that there is a limit on words for submission, but I would love to hear more about their life.

I loved your description of the eyes: Wide eyes, mature eyes, teary eyes. Nicely done.
Beautifully told and very touching. Very glad the dad came home. Like your descriptions too.
05/07/05
I also liked the theme of eyes through the piece. Mental illness is such a difficult thing for families as well as the sufferer. Thanks for bringing the plight of families of patients to light in this context.
05/07/05
P.S. A tip for making future entries even better.... Just leave a space between paragraphs. It makes it easier to read. Loved the title, too, by the way - very apt.