The Official Writing Challenge
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06/01/07
Very creative adventure!
06/02/07
Very sweet.
06/04/07
Great details..... and the adventure is only beginning :)
06/04/07
What a creative take on the topic! It took me quite a while to catch on, but that made it so much more delightful! Great job.
Great descriptions. Enjoyed it thoroughly.
06/04/07
The first paragraph was very good, hinting without letting me know outright where you were taking me. Good descriptions.

I especially liked this line: "A wailing sound filled her ears, and Kaitlyn realized, with an odd sense of power, that it was coming from her."
And from that point on, a baby knows how to use that cry to communicate, don't they? Good job!
I loved this. You grabbed my attention right away, kept it, and then surprised me! Great job.
Neat twist to suprise us! Very creative idea - great job!
Oops, that would be "surprise us" not "suprise us" - sorry about that!
Beautiful story of the adventure of birth. How crative and well told!
This was so fun! The first couple of paragraphs had an almost science-fiction feel to them, and then I laughed out loud as I realized what was happening.

I, too, like the sentence where the baby realizes her cry has power. If only the little ones wouldn't catch on so quick... :-P

Great job, this was so fun to read and very well-written.
Great account of a birth here. Good job.
This is beautiful! I always knew birth was an adventure for the mother. I never thought of it from the infant's POV.
06/06/07
Sweet and simple. This is beautiful reading and well written. I liked this take on the adventure, especially the last line. Good job.
06/06/07
Very Kool. God bless.
06/06/07
Great point of view! I did my senior science research on the memory of a newborn in relation to hearing mom's recorded heartbeat...calmed newborns for a few weeks after birth! Your story reminded me of that powerful bond. :)
Wow... my eyes got wide as I realized what this was about. I absolutely love this!
06/07/07
Precious! Creative and awesome!