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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Life, Limited Edition
By Angeline oppenheimer
05/23/07


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Life, Limited Edition


I want the house upon the hill
The thousand cattle too.
I want the Lexus my neighbor toots
And fancy GPS tool.
I want the lawn, so velvety green
The giant cactus and leggy palms.
I want the sparkling pool
The water-cushion slide
And margaritas by the tiki bar.
I want to shop at Nordstsroms,
Saks Fifth and lug the Large Brown bag
Just like Mrs. Jones with her designer sack.
I want the gadgets her kids display
Transecting the cul-de-sac with his Segway
Oxymoron of size and price.
Juicy Couture totes for her little tot
And a seven thousand dollar sax just for school band.

My copper eyes are a metastasized green.
My tongue long with hanging
With worldly desires.
They twinkle and shine and beckon
With silhouettes of happiness,
Shades of sophistication.
Lord, I cant help it
So earth bound by short vision
And fleshy tentacles grabbing
Clamoring, wishful longing .

Carpe Diem?

Fleeting pleasures
Transient hopes and desires
Glimmer of pomp and glamour
Shafts of fading beauty
Through windows soon to be dimmed.
Wants magnified into needs
Is that all you want, Child?

Mayflies, Day-Lilies, Roses..
Here today, gone tomorrow,
Breath that dries with the seasons of time,
Pleasures that feed and never satisfy
Verily, verily, the span of threes scores and one
Like a dream, a shadow, a mist, a vapor, the wind
A soft sigh that evaporates before it slips out.

SI..G.H

Do you see, my child?


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Jacquelyn Horne05/25/07
Our greed can only last a lifetime. Our pleasures are there for eternity.
Dee Yoder 05/26/07
Your poem helps me visualize how easily we can be lured into accepting things that aren't at all important to our life and souls. I especially like the descriptions of greed in the beginning lines of this poem.
David Butler 05/26/07
Point taken! Helps me see things in proper perspective again.
I got a bit lost in the last 2 stanzas, then realized at the end that it was God talking. Could that have been enclosed in quotes ("..")?
Kenn Allan05/26/07
This is almost two poems for the price of one; the first speaker is totally different than the voice of God at the end. Very impressive!
Jeanette Oestermyer 05/27/07
How I enjoyed reading this poem. The title is quite intriqueing to say the least. Also, the poem is a kind of lesson for those who want everything NOW.
Valerie Routhieaux05/27/07
Good title. Well written. Envy and greed trouble our lives and we forget that God just wants us to relax in what He is so willing to give us. His love with all the added bonuses.
Rhonda Clark 05/28/07
I like this. It's a testament to everyday life. Good work.
Marilyn Schnepp 05/29/07
The subject matter is great...and has a message for us all; but as for the poetic form, it wasn't the usual rhyming type of poetry, but perhaps an expert could pinpoint it better than I. But I liked the message.