Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Identity check
By Lucile McKenzie
05/22/07


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

Every now and then I give some thought
As to who I am, and who I知 not.

I知 a feeder of squirrels and other small creatures. I知 not a bully or a companion of crooks,
But, instead, I知 a dreamer and reader of books.
I have tears and laughter both close at hand,
And will share them with you, as you command.

A mixture of qualities, oh, not perfect am I!
I知 not a backbiter, bigot or betrayer,
Not petty, prideful, or a prevaricator.
But stubborn! A mule has nothing on me!
Offbeat, indulgent, inept, I can be.
.
I知 a planter of flowers and lover of prisms.
But not practical, like a mathematician,
Or useful, as a plumber or electrician.
I知 a constant cut up, screw up, bumbler.
A chatterbox, cornball, lifelong fumbler.

But, I was created by the Lord God above
And, flaws and all, I bask in His love.


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 486 times
Member Comments
Member Date
c clemons05/25/07
I have never seen a poen where one line just kept going. Your poem was very good except for that one line.
Dee Yoder 05/26/07
I like your poem. From your descriptions, I think you would be a fun, loyal friend! It's a happy poem that makes me smile.
Kenn Allan05/26/07
What a fun autobiographical sketch. I feel I know you now!

NOTE: Since the other stanzas consist of five lines each, I'm sure that longer line is simply a formatting error and was intended to be divided in half; however, this does not diminish the quality or the enjoyment of this piece.
Valerie Routhieaux05/27/07
Thanks for the intimate look at who you are. Well done.
Rhonda Clark 05/27/07
Love how you include the negative traits too. Good work.
Jacquelyn Horne05/28/07
Loved the last two lines. They say it all.
Benjamin Graber05/30/07
I enjoyed your mix of fun rhymes and alliteration.
I would suggest that you avoid the use of the rhyme above/love - it is far overused in Christian peotry, and it sounds like you tacked the word "above" on just because it rhymes.
Keep up the good work!