The Official Writing Challenge
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05/25/07
I have never seen a poen where one line just kept going. Your poem was very good except for that one line.
05/26/07
I like your poem. From your descriptions, I think you would be a fun, loyal friend! It's a happy poem that makes me smile.
05/26/07
What a fun autobiographical sketch. I feel I know you now!

NOTE: Since the other stanzas consist of five lines each, I'm sure that longer line is simply a formatting error and was intended to be divided in half; however, this does not diminish the quality or the enjoyment of this piece.
Thanks for the intimate look at who you are. Well done.
05/27/07
Love how you include the negative traits too. Good work.
Loved the last two lines. They say it all.
I enjoyed your mix of fun rhymes and alliteration.
I would suggest that you avoid the use of the rhyme above/love - it is far overused in Christian peotry, and it sounds like you tacked the word "above" on just because it rhymes.
Keep up the good work!