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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)
As children play and run about
They’ve no concept of time
What matters most is done right then
And is that such a crime?

Rules and laws bind adults
Silencing cries within
Dreams along the way
Are trash tossed in a bin

Pressure mounts like laundry
Neglected on a heap
It will not hide
Nor under carpet sweep

Loves are lost, songs unsung
Friends no longer seen
Intentions left behind
Calls instead they screen

Family asked to step aside
Waiting for “someday”
Words are not in harmony
The battle… go or stay?

God wants time they don’t have
Church imposes more
Reading, praying, offerings
Guilt checked at the door

Higher power, needless bunk
Strength comes from the mind
Work and study all you can
Then success you’ll find

Life is not a child’s game
Laughing, giggling, free
Sunday school was in the past
Who prays on bended knee?

One day to wake alone
Wondering what went wrong
Health has fled, skin a dread
Past hope no longer strong

With muffled song and heavy heart
Each day blends with the next
A private plea for some relief
Just brings back ancient text

“Unless a man will receive
God’s kingdom as a child
He will never enter in*”
So simple, meek, and mild

“He took the children in his arms
Placing his hands on them
Blessing them**” forever more
From where all peace must stem

Accepting Christ is not enough
It’s how we live each day
Fretting, fighting, worrying
Or praising Him, His way

It’s not too old nor too late
Be born-again dear child
Loving, learning, listening
Open, free, part wild

Children know to stretch or reach
Regardless if they fall
Pain passes with laurels lain
To walk one has to crawl

Live life as God intended
Daily in His Word
Love others as yourself
Till their hearts are stirred

As children play and run about
They’ve no concept of time
What matters most is done right then
And is that such a crime?

© 05-20-2007
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* Mark 10:15 (NIV)
**Mark 10:16 (NIV)
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Member Comments
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Date
Sheri Gordon
05/24/07
This is good -- such a simple, but powerful message. Nice job.
Rhonda Clark
05/25/07
Great message. I love this and it made a great point.
Kenn Allan 
05/27/07
Oh, to reclaim the innocence of our youth and demonstrate it in our mature walk with the Lord. This piece makes me want to build a kite and send it into the heavens...
Valerie Routhieaux
05/27/07
Well done, too often we allow life to take first place when God wants that position and only asks that we trust like a child.
Jacquelyn Horne
05/27/07
Good pov here. Come as a child.
dub W
05/30/07
This is solid poetic writing. Brings images of Jesus and the children to mind. Thanks for sharing.
Donna Powers
05/30/07
Very nice message, and a nicely written poem. Thanks for sharing it
Joanne Sher 
05/30/07
Lovely - I enjoyed this very much.
Patty Wysong
05/30/07
This is good! The imagery is well done and fits beautifully. The point of it is Great!
Rita Garcia
05/30/07
A wonderful gift you have, like a painting on a canvas!
Linda Settles
03/13/09
Your words are so true. Chuck Swindoll once noted that we often are so busy taking care of the urgent that we miss the important. No wonder Jesus said that we must become as little children if we would enter the kingdom of heaven. Children have their priorities straight. They live in the moment seldom worry about tomorrow. Our Heavenly Father is able to take care of all our tomorrows.