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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Humility, and how I lost it.
By David Butler
05/19/07


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O have you seen my nice, warm coat?
ĎTis drab as drab could be.
And on the collar, Jesus wrote
Itís name: ďHumility.Ē

It warms my heart if I grow cold.
It keeps out all my pride.
And angry words and boasting bold
Are buttoned up inside.

I wear it when Iím unaware;
When I donít think of Me!
But when I start to think itís there,
Itís nowhere I can see!

I wear it round the house a lot.
My kids can always tell
If it is on; but if itís notÖ
Man! Can they give me hell!

My wife and I, we never fight,
We just get quite intense.
What right has she to be so right?
It just does not make sense!

When I get agro, sheís so kind.
My flesh, it has to die!
In my coat pockets, there I find
A piece of Humble Pie.

At work I wore it when, at lunch,
I faced a grouchy boss.
I had to roll with every punch
And get off my high hoss.

My workmates scoff: ďThis Christian dude,
A humble coat he wears!
Letís put hot chili in his food
And then see if he swears!Ē

I wore it to the working bee
That they had on at church.
They did not call ďItís Morning Tea!Ē
And left me in the lurch!

I think Iíve hit the mark, but miss!
Itís kind of like a ghost!
Of all the Christ-like virtues, this
Can frustrate me the most!

Yet though elusive it may be,
It flows through many a story.
Perhaps one day the world will see
This radiant cloak of glory.

ďÖ.. and be clothed with humility: for God resisteth the proud, and giveth grace to the humble.Ē (1 Peter 5:5 KJV)


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Jacquelyn Horne05/25/07
I liked this. It tells a good story on humility.
Dee Yoder 05/26/07
So true! Your poetry shows your sense of humor; you made me smile as I read.
Kenn Allan05/26/07
Not only is this a great lesson in humility, the poem itself is a good example of maintaining a 8-6-8-6 rhythm pattern. Good job.
LaNaye Perkins05/26/07
I loved the poem and I loved it's message. Well done!
Sharlyn Guthrie05/26/07
I'm smiling! Nice job.
Valerie Routhieaux05/26/07
It can also be said that we are the only bible that many will read. Nicely done.
Tracy Walshaw05/27/07
I love the "street sense" of this work; you are in the trenches fighting the good fight. Excellent job!
Rhonda Clark05/27/07
I love this. It's wonderful.
Donna Emery05/28/07
Very, very good! Some nicely added humor adds to its enjoyment. I enjoyed this one very much
Lenda Blackmon05/29/07
enjoyed this, I too struggle with pride. I guess everyone does to some degree. It's when we stop struggling that we get in trouble. Good job!
Rita Garcia05/30/07
Oh,that ole spirit of PRIDE! Well written!
Joanne Sher 05/30/07
I just love everything about this. One of my favorites so far. Fun, playful, meaningful, and convicting!
dub W05/30/07
Nice humor and great truths.
Patty Wysong05/30/07
I love how you wrapped such a great message in a fun wrapper. A new way to hear an old (still needed!) lesson. Great job!!
Edy T Johnson 05/30/07
What an imaginative illustration of the scripture verse! Your title is a grabber, and the lilting rhyme and rhythm (not to mention the pictures painted by your words) kept me reading and enjoying your poem clear to the end.
Helen Murray05/31/07
I think I hear Father chuckling at this one.
Janice Cartwright06/20/08
I love the way this wraps around your message. :) The cadence is perfect and rhyming, slightly ironic humor- and well, just everything. Very good.