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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: Crocodile Tears & Buffalo Wings
By Marilyn Schnepp
05/18/07


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Have you ever heard
A sparrow complain
That robins have red vests
While they're quite plain?

And surely the burro
Has legitimate gripes:
When he says he feels dull
Next to a zebra with stripes.

And what about the camel
With his crooked spine;
Surely you've heard him
Simmer and whine?

And listen to the buffalo,
Have you heard him cry?
He begs God for wings
So he can fly.

Does the beaver wish
For a bushy tail?
And the bushy tailed fox
Want a house like a snail?

Is the turtle jealous
Of the cheetah's speed?
Does he wish he could climb
Up into a tree to feed?

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No, my friend,
Nature's quite content;
It's human beings
Who weep and lament.

They alter their hair color,
Tan and whiten their skin,
Starve themselves silly
Just to be pencil thin.

Then pierce their navals,
Lips, tongues and eyes;
And Dye, paint and tuck
Their hair, nails and thighs.

Man's so disgruntled
With WHO he is,
That God only knows
If he's a Mister or Miz.

Now, you and I know
We were formed out of sod;
Designed and created
In the image of God.

So think of it THIS way;
It must break His heart
Each time that we alter
His best Work of Art


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Sheri Gordon05/24/07
Very clever, and well written. I love the title. Humorous with a tremendous message. Nice job.
Rhonda Clark 05/24/07
Love this. Great point.
Dennis Fletcher05/25/07
Wow, completely true, a wonderful poem. Although, I thought buffaloes had wings, isn't that what they serve on Friday night's with pizza?
c clemons05/25/07
This one was simple and had a very good message, I liked it.
Dee Yoder 05/26/07
I enjoyed reading your poem very much. The humor helps the medicine go down. We are very discontent with ourselves, aren't we? Good writing.
David Butler 05/26/07
Brilliant use of humour to hammer a good point home. Loved it.
Kenn Allan05/26/07
I LOVE this message - and the title is perfect. The writer had some fun writing this, I bet. Fun read!
Valerie Routhieaux05/26/07
Very well done, and very true. Humans are a mysterious brew. But only to ourselves, God still knows each of us by the tone of his heart.
Telika Howard05/27/07
Very well written however it's what's in a man's heart that's most important to God
"Therefore judge nothing before the appointed time; wait till the Lord comes. He will bring to light what is hidden in darkness and will expose the motives of men's hearts. At that time each will receive his praise from God." 1 Corinthians 4:5
Sherrie Jackson05/28/07
Very creative poem! My only critique -

Isn't is WOman who's so disgruntled? Men have it soooo easy when it comes to appearance... :-P
Donna Emery05/28/07
a great title and a wonderful message. An element of sly humor helps the poem. Very good!
Jacquelyn Horne05/28/07
Very cute poetry here. This is a good example of how we humans are. Good job.
dub W05/28/07
Love the title and the cute, clever verses. Good job.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/29/07
A very clever, creative, humorous take on man's or woman's self-dissatisfaction!
Tracy Walshaw05/31/07
This was a great poem! It would be a wonderful one for children to read, as well, because of the fun way to learn a profound truth.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/31/07
Congratulations, Marilyn! This is a poem truly deserving of a win!
Sara Harricharan 05/31/07
This is beautiful! The touch of humor, and the title especially creative. Wonderful writing...Congrats!
Sheri Gordon05/31/07
Congratulations on your 2nd place. I really liked your poem, and am so glad to see it placed. Good job.
Mo 05/31/07
Nice!
Marilyn Schnepp 05/31/07
Author's Note: Info for self...28th in Top Forty
Rebecca Jones06/16/07
It would be great to turn this poem into a children's book -- I hear little girls ALREADY complaining about themselves -- you truly deserve the win -- BRAVO!
Marilyn Schnepp 07/25/07
Note to Self: A puppy in Dub's Puppy Pen! Honored!