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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the POETRY genre (05/17/07)

TITLE: I'm Not Afraid
By Patricia Casey
05/17/07


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~~~
I’m not afraid of anything
No circumstance will fear doth bring
Not death nor life nor wind nor rain
My heart’s protected from the pain
~~~
A pedophile did taint this child
And introduced me to the wild
It’s no big deal a hardened heart
Without a soul it does depart
~~~
This body trained perhaps I’ll sell
There’s nothing else I do that well
The feelings came I was surprised
I even cried the day he died
~~~
My life to blame when I would sin
Could always figure how to win
With self improvement I was good
Did better than my neighbors could
~~~
I found the speck in sister’s eye
The plank in mine unnoticed. Why?
Her skills as mother I did judge
Abortion chosen was my smudge
~~~
But I was good I told myself
Good deeds I framed upon the shelf
The clothes I wore, the cars I drove
Did feed the fairy tale I wove
~~~
With all my hate His Word broke through
And pierced my heart with dart He threw
I did not know I was afraid
Till hardened heart was time to trade
~~~
I was afraid of many things
Of feeling, caring, pain it brings
He showed His love, exposed my fears
New heart, no hiding from my tears
~~~
With every lesson He did teach
New freedom found within my reach
I’m still afraid but now I try
With God I’m not afraid I'll die
~~~
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X-rayed is a new poetry format I created. The first stanza begins with things you can see on the surface. The second and subsequent stanzas reveal more hidden meanings or revelations that pertain to the first stanza but were unseen until closer scrutiny emerged with the hidden secrets.

Rhyming scheme: aa/bb/cc/dd, etc.

Each line must use Iambic tetrameter - eight syllables with alternating short/long syllable emphasis as follows:
da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM

Poems must have at least four stanzas, each four lines long. No maximum stanza limit.

The first stanza shows what's seen on the surface.
The following stanzas reveal hidden things.
The final stanza reveals the discovered truth.


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Sheri Gordon05/24/07
This is very good. I am impressed that you could design a new form of poetry -- and it works well.

This must be a personal story -- it sounds straight for the heart. Thank you for sharing.
Marilyn Schnepp 05/25/07
Interesting system, along with A Complex read. Unsure what is meant...but it touched on a sad past. God bless.
c clemons05/25/07
That's nice that you created a new form of poetry but it still has to invite the reader in. This one was a bit choppy to me. But that's just one opinion, keep writing.
Sandra Petersen 05/26/07
This is a very well-told poetic revealing of a wounded heart. I appreciated the author's notes in identifying the meter, rhyme scheme, and format.

The lines that 'worked' for me were: "I found the speck in sister’s eye
The plank in mine unnoticed. Why?"
"But I was good I told myself
Good deeds I framed upon the shelf" and
"I’m still afraid but now I try
With God I’m not afraid I'll die" (still the best message a Christian can receive).

Thanks for sharing.
Kenn Allan05/26/07
It is refreshing to find a writer who is able to define his/her parameters and then stay within them. This is the kind of discipline which helps many stand out in the crowd. Kudos.

The message was clearly from the heart, and poetry is said to be the language of the heart. You spoke, and I understood.
LaNaye Perkins05/26/07
I love your style with poetry. I'm impressed with how you developed your own style. Great work!
Jacquelyn Horne05/26/07
You tell the story well here.
Valerie Routhieaux05/26/07
Sounds like a testimony set to poetry. Very well done.
Rhonda Clark 05/27/07
I like your poem. Great job on creating a new form.
Donna Emery05/28/07
Very interesting form and a very intense but interesting story. Keep writing! Very creative!


   
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