The Official Writing Challenge
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05/25/07
Nicely done. Enjoyed the rhythmic beat of the poem along with the great message based on a Bible verse. Creative and I thoroughly enjoyed the read! Good Job!
Very good poem about staying watchful and aware of the enemy.
05/26/07
Very good thoughts. Like the interpretation of scripture.
05/26/07
Well-written! The message was excellent, the rhyme almost perfect. This is powerful.

These lines really stood out to me for the parallelism:
"His gleaming teeth they do not see
His soundless steps they do not hear
As each moment brings him near"

Beautiful!
05/26/07
Nicely done - the meter pulls the reader right through. I liked the content, too.
Well done. The poem fits the scripture very well. We do need to keep alert.
05/28/07
very, very good. Excellent form and a very good parable. Nice work
05/29/07
This is a well-written poem with a sobering message! The whole thing flowed very well! Good job! :)