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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the SCIENCE FICTION genre (05/10/07)

TITLE: A Genealogist's Dream
By Misti Chancellor
05/14/07


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It was a crisp October day. The early morning sun shone with a golden haze on US 73 as she traveled toward Nebraska City. When she was approximately three miles south of the city, she pulled off to the side of the road and turned off the car. Picking up her HP 4400 tablet computer, she turned it on and started the time warp program. Plugging in the parameters – the year, 1869, and the GPS coordinates for where she now sat – she clicked on the go button and waited. Her world went fuzzy for a few seconds, and when her vision cleared, she was seated a buggy. Setting the computer down on the seat beside her, she picked up the reins and clucked to the horse. A farmhouse was just up the road.

She pulled into the drive and stopped the buggy. Climbing down, she hitched the horse to the fence rail, and headed for the front door. She felt a little conspicuous in her jean skirt, t-shirt and tennis shoes, but that couldn’t be helped.

“Psst… ma’am.” Startled, she turned and looked at the man who was holding a gun. “Please go back to your buggy. There’s a dangerous outlaw in this house, and I don’t want you to get hurt when we arrest him.” The newspaper articles flitted through her mind. “Are you Sheriff Hail?” she asked. He looked surprised. “Yes, that’s me.” “I know you’re trying to protect me, but please, may I speak to him when you have the situation under control?” she queried. He gave her a quizzical look, but agreed. Turning she went back to the buggy and climbed in.

She watched as the sheriff approached the door of the home and knocked. “It’s the law. Open up!” The door opened and a man came barreling out onto the porch brandishing a navy revolver. “Take me at your peril!” he shouted. His tousled, curly auburn hair glowed in the sunlight. She could see the false bravado in his stance, the sweat glistening on his face, as his eyes darted around, looking for a means of escape. The posse that was stationed around the house came forward to back up the sheriff. She noticed his revolver drop toward the floor the moment he realized that escape wasn’t going to happen. The sheriff moved in and the arrest was complete.

Climbing down from the buggy, she approached the group. “Please, sheriff, can I talk to him for a few minutes?” As the prisoner turned his clear, grey eyes toward her, a brief look of hope flashed through them, and she realized he thought she was going to help him escape. The sheriff gave her permission and stepped slightly to the side to give a little privacy, but held onto the rope that bound the prisoner’s hands.

She looked the prisoner in the eye. “Charles? Why did you throw away your talents and ability to lead on this gang? Wasn’t there some other way that you could provide for your wife and boys than a life of crime?” He looked at her, confused. “Ma’am, I’m sorry, but, do I know you from somewhere?” The sun glinted off her wavy, auburn hair as she turned her blue eyes to meet his grey ones. “I’m a … distant relative. Please, for your sons’ sake, won’t you change?” He gave her a brief look of remorse. “Maybe someday,” he said. It was enough. She stepped back and nodded to the sheriff.

Turning, she went back to the buggy, unhitched the horse, and climbed in. She sat for a few moments as she watched the sheriff, the posse and the prisoner ride away. Turning the buggy, she headed back down the road.

Reaching her previous location, she reached over and picked up the computer. She clicked the “Return to present” button and waited. Everything went fuzzy for a few moments, and then she was once again sitting in her car on the shoulder of US 73.

She looked up in the rearview mirror and noticed a highway patrolman approaching her car. “Ma’am, is everything ok?” She glanced at his badge, and smiled. “Yes, Officer Hail, everything’s fine. I pulled over here to do some things on my computer. I finished up just now, so I’ll be on my way. Thanks for checking on me!”

She watched him in her rearview mirror as he returned to his patrol car and pulled back onto the road. Starting her car, she headed for home.


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Shari Armstrong 05/17/07
Would love to see what changes happened... (a couple minor typos "...like she was seated IN a buggy."), and possibly a nice start to something larger.
Esther Gellert05/17/07
This sounds like the start of a much longer story. I wish I knew what happened. Did her visit change anything? Did it affect her life? How?
I could picture each scene nicely. I did notice the minor typo's Shari mentioned, but they did not detract from the story. Well done.
Benjamin Graber05/18/07
I like how you connected the cpnsequences of the past with the present in this story. Keep up the good work!
Jacquelyn Horne05/20/07
The writing here is very good. I'm sure we would all like to change the past to alter the future.
Jan Ackerson 05/21/07
My dad's a genealogist, and he'd sure love to do this! fun to read, thanks a bunch!
Jan Ackerson 05/21/07
My dad's a genealogist, and he'd sure love to do this! fun to read, thanks a bunch!
Joanne Sher 05/21/07
Intriguing concept nicely written! Would love to hear if anything changed - and where the next stop would be! Great job.
Patty Wysong05/21/07
A fun read! Did her visit make a difference? It was neat that the sheriff and officer were both Hails. :-)
Sara Harricharan 05/23/07
A dream or real life? I enjoyed this. I'm guessing the character/avatar is...Charles? Hmmm, very good writing, I like the descriptions and the dialouge between them. Nicely done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/23/07
A very clever time-travel story. I like how you linked it together. (I thought it would have been an additional connecting touch if they both had auburn hair and blue eyes.)
Rita Garcia05/23/07
CLEVER...CREATIVE and OH! so well written!
Betty Castleberry05/23/07
An entertaining read. I like to dabble in genealogy, so this was fun for me.
Nicely done.
Pam Carlson-Hetland05/23/07
This was intriguing to read. It was like a fun sci-fi TV show series episode. Very creative idea. Well written, a good read!


   
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