The Official Writing Challenge
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05/07/07
What an absolutely lovely poem!
your word choices are delectable! I would only suggest editing a little more carefully, (over flows should be one word, and perhaps 'steam' should have been 'stem'?) You are a gifted poet, and I hope you will keep inspiring us with your gift.
Beautiful poem! You did a lovely job with this one...
I would suggest that you consider adding punctuation to make this poem clearer and easier to read.
Keep up the good work!
Blessings,
Ben