The Official Writing Challenge
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05/03/07
This is really a beautiful poem. I'm not usually a fan of poetry, but this really touched me. Nice writing.
A poem with a great message. It seemed the last line of each stamza lost the rhythm that was carried in the other lines. It may have been due to the line length. I enjoyed reading the poem. God Bless
05/06/07
I like your use of repetition here. It makes the poem more lyrical, almost like the words of a song.

I think some more attention to the meter would improve this poem a bit.

Thanks for sharing this!