The Official Writing Challenge
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A nice poem, with a message. Be sure to check your spelling; also check for 'extra clutter' words, or words not needed.

Keep writing, and God Bless,

An allegory, a fable, and a poem, all wrapped up in one tidy package!

Work on consistency of meter to give your poem more polish.
Matched couplets are tough, you made the grade there, but watch your prosody and spelling. You're on the right track. Keep writing.