The Official Writing Challenge
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04/28/07
WOW! You had my heart skiping a beat or two waiting to see how this would turn out! "I'd rather talk to my car." Terrific line -lol. Great story and great writing!
Good romance. Would have liked a little more story, a little rushed at the end. But very good writing and good story plot.
How wonderful it is when God takes over and gives us what we need, whether we know it or not! I had a bit of trouble keeping up with who was speaking and thinking what at time, a few POV issues. But it didn't detract from the overall story, and I just felt it coming, the fact that God had a single all lined up for this gal who "didn't want to date" any of these guys... Nice job. Blessings, Cheri
05/02/07
I could FEEL the struggle, the emotion, the awkwardness - the signs of a good writer. Well done.
I could feel your emotions for the beginning of your own love story. I, too, had a little difficulty with some of the POV's; however, overall it was a good story.
Loved this! So fast-paced and very vivid descriptions. I like the feel of you-are-there and the continuous stream of thoughts running through her head. The author's note was a clincher though. What a cute couple. ^_^
Enjoyed the frank way you were able to bring us into the MC's thoughts. True emotions are not always easy to write about as they can be convoluted at times. I liked the message, too, that we may have our plans, but God directs our steps...sometimes right into the arms of our intended spouses.
05/03/07
Yes I loved the way you wrote the inner thoughts and wondered if this sweet story was a testimony as well. Very romantic and realistic look at moving on after a shattered heart!