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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)

TITLE: What Just Happened?
By Angela M. Baker-Bridge
04/25/07


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“Why’d I give in? It’s not my problem they’re short-handed. My heart screamed no but I'd let her pressure me. Good, another red light, I can check my make-up before I get to church. Yikes! I looked better at home. Maybe it’s the sunshine. Summer’s ending with gorgeous days, after church, I’ll hike or read outside. If I’m sacrificing for Singles’ Ministry, I’m treating myself.”

That woman’s looking at me weird. She’s wondering who I’m talking to… I’ll show my earpiece more; she’ll think I’m on the phone, yeah. Hopefully, she’s not from church.

“People tell me socializing with other singles will help me readjust. It won’t, because most of them want to date. My ex is dating. I'd rather talk to my car. We’ve been through a lot together. Leaving that courtroom was the worst. I never believed in divorce. It happened, but it hasn’t changed my mind. Why date when I can’t remarry? Not as a Christian, not in my family.”

There’s a parking spot. Now, where’s the meeting room? This church is like a mall. Boy, something in the cafeteria smells delicious. Wonder what the Singles will serve. Love her hair! There’s the sign. Breathe! It’s only for today. I’ll never be back.

“Hello! I’m facilitating JUST today.”

“We’re expecting you. Would you please sign-in, and make a nametag. Until we begin, mingle, introduce yourself, and enjoy brunch!”

There’s at least 150 people here, these guys look older than 55, so do some of the women.

“Hello. I’m facilitating today, hope you’ll stay for the Christian Dating Book Review at 12:30!”

How many introductions has that been? I wonder who’s in my group. Please, not him. She seems nice. Who repeated that question three times? Can I turn nonchalantly...

“So, are you going to the service?”

Almost seems like he’s speaking to me… “Excuse me, you talking to ME?”

“Yes, I’m asking you to the 12:30 service.”

“No thanks, I went last night.”

“It wasn’t good enough to hear twice?” Shoot...

“It is, but I’m facilitating the Book Review.”

“I’ve never seen you here.”

“That’s because I attend another group.” Fortunately.

“Are you coming back?”

“No. I’m sorry but I’ve got to find my table.”

Exactly why I didn’t want to come, and it’s only been five minutes. Poor guy’s clueless.

WOW! Now who’s that flash of lightning? Tall, dark hair, his tan says he loves being outside, like me. He’s too well dressed. He must have a girlfriend ... single guys can’t pull themselves together that well. Too bad, what am I thinking! Get a grip.

“Good morning! Please find a seat and we'll begin.”

Whoa, its Mr. Well-dressed. He’s in leadership?

Hmm, nice opening prayer, clear delivery and smooth on the eyes too!
Remember, it’s about my group…


“Hi! I’m your facilitator and I encourage you to stay for the Book Review. I haven’t heard today’s devotional speaker before but I’m sure he’ll be good.”

“Oh, he’s fabulous. You’ll see.”

These women’s eyes are glued to him, that's why they put him up front, to attract women. Bet he's not much of a teacher.

Excellent illustration, I take that back, he’s an experienced speaker, maybe a former preacher. I’ll find out during break. Asking around seems juvenile. I’ll just introduce myself as I’ve been doing to everyone else. This is stupid. I don’t want to date the guy, I’m just curious. Its break time…


“Told you he’s incredible, he was a pastor.”

Thought so! Perfect, he’s coming this way. Just be casual. Why am I getting fluttery?

“Hi! Enjoyed your devotional and thought I'd introduce myself.”

“Thank you very much.”

That’s it? Shot-down! Could he get away any faster? Let’s get this book thing over, and I'm gone.

I knew I’d hate this discussion. It’s Junior High again. What a statement, “If God loves me where’s my mate?” Listen to this speechmaker. Who is it? Hey the preacher; didn’t see him behind that pole. Sorry fella, you’re not getting away with that statement…

Glad it’s over. Should I say something to him before I leave? Just a few minutes…


“Wow! We’ve talked almost four hours!” Was I rambling?

“Yup, I missed the football game, it's okay though. Can we pray before we leave?”

My heart’s thumping. What a prayer! What a man of God!

“Will you be back next week?”

“Absolutely!” Breathe. Wait until you’re in the car. I’m, I'm...

“What just happened? God what’re you doing? Now, he’s perfect* for me!”


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*"Do not be like them, for your Father knows what you need before you ask him." Matthew 6:8 (NIV)

AUTHOR'S NOTE: Five months later, I repeated those same three last lines, on Our Wedding Day!

©April 25, 2007


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Rita Garcia04/28/07
WOW! You had my heart skiping a beat or two waiting to see how this would turn out! "I'd rather talk to my car." Terrific line -lol. Great story and great writing!
Jacquelyn Horne04/30/07
Good romance. Would have liked a little more story, a little rushed at the end. But very good writing and good story plot.
Cheri Hardaway 05/01/07
How wonderful it is when God takes over and gives us what we need, whether we know it or not! I had a bit of trouble keeping up with who was speaking and thinking what at time, a few POV issues. But it didn't detract from the overall story, and I just felt it coming, the fact that God had a single all lined up for this gal who "didn't want to date" any of these guys... Nice job. Blessings, Cheri
Lynda Schultz 05/02/07
I could FEEL the struggle, the emotion, the awkwardness - the signs of a good writer. Well done.
Verna Cole Mitchell 05/02/07
I could feel your emotions for the beginning of your own love story. I, too, had a little difficulty with some of the POV's; however, overall it was a good story.
Sara Harricharan 05/02/07
Loved this! So fast-paced and very vivid descriptions. I like the feel of you-are-there and the continuous stream of thoughts running through her head. The author's note was a clincher though. What a cute couple. ^_^
Loren T. Lowery05/02/07
Enjoyed the frank way you were able to bring us into the MC's thoughts. True emotions are not always easy to write about as they can be convoluted at times. I liked the message, too, that we may have our plans, but God directs our steps...sometimes right into the arms of our intended spouses.
Julie Arduini05/02/07
Yes I loved the way you wrote the inner thoughts and wondered if this sweet story was a testimony as well. Very romantic and realistic look at moving on after a shattered heart!