The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow, you packed a lot of story into 750 words! A complete plot arc--not a simple accomplishment.

Unlike the mother-in-law, I found the situation a bit problematic--both the timing of their affection and their actions. But I'm aware that I may be in the minority here.

You did a good job with portraying your protagonist's emotional roller coaster.

I really liked this story. It would be nice if our computer spell checker would find all our little errors, wouldn't it? For instance, why doesn't it find all the quote marks that don't have a their twin. :o) (Didn't detract from your fine story, just made it a little harder to read in places.)

I was confused at the end when you introduced her mother, and then the brother-in-law mentions HIS mother gives her approval. So I'm not sure if BOTH mothers gave their nod of approval, or if Julia is so close to her mother-in-law that she thinks of her as, and calls her, "mother."

Those things aside, I liked the story, and the way the story developed and the characters are believable. Kudos to you!

Lots of detail packed into "750" words! I like your title, "Two of the Same Heart."