The Official Writing Challenge
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04/28/07
I really liked the ending, and the setting of this fable-like piece.

I wonder if you could have done away with a bit of the back story, in order to work more on characterization.

This piece worked quite well for the week's genre.
A good romantic story. True love, unable to blossom. Good writing.
04/29/07
Good job!
Bummer for a 750 word count!! This could be expanded. It's wonderful as is, but promises so much more. Good story, excellent writing.
Lovely story. Wonderful to see true love prevail in the end.