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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)

TITLE: The Dance
By Henry Clemmons
04/21/07


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Battle forefront rages
Blazing fires
Flame lit smoke
Framed in
Swirling darkness.

The general
Atop his steed
Sword drawn
Peers rearward
O’er squared shoulders
Toward the dawn.

The moment
Frozen
Captured on canvas
For eternity.

His love’s eyes flash
Like twin suns
Pleading
Peeking
Reaching
Through the throng
Of faceless patrons
In the art gallery.

She poses in silence
Gloved hands clasped
Eyes fixed
On the distance
Her check wet
With one lone tear.

Two separate paintings
Of a final second
Hang on opposite walls.

The General
A moment before death.

His love
A last glimpse
Of her strength.

At night
Ceiling security lights
Create circles
On tiled floor
In the quiet
Empty room.

A Spark
A twinkle
A sprinkle
Of golden dust
Floats from above
To glittered floor.

The general
Dressed in stiff
White shirt
And creased
Black pants
Sheaths his sword
Alights from his stallion
And stands tall
In shinny black boots.

His love
Steps from wooden frame
Straightens flowing
Blue gown
Her smile broadens
A white gloved hand
Wipes the wetness
From powdered rosy cheek.

The General waits
In the light
For his love
Who reaches for his
Scarred hand.

He gently kisses
Her fingers
As he draws her close.

The General
And his love
Dance and twirl
Hearts beating
Lips quivering as they
Step and move
To the melody
Of their love.

The General’s lips
Whisper gently
Softly in his
Love’s ear
“Tell me again
Of your prayer
As I rode to my
Final battle.”

His love’s eyes
Glisten
As her breath
Speaks in their
Embrace.
“I prayed
To Dance with you
Once again.”

“And you
My love
Your thoughts
As you glanced
Back towards
The dawn.”

The General
Kisses her cheek
And pulls her
Nearer to his heart.
“To dance once more
With my love.”

In the morning
A broom
Sweeps
The mysterious
Gold dust.

The General
Gazes back
At the dawn.

Across the gallery
His love
Prays for
One last dance.

“Until tonight,”
The General
Whispers.
“Until tonight”
His love responds.


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Sherrie Jackson04/26/07
Now this I like! It's very cool how you have a lot of the elements of a typical romance story, without using a typical format. I'm not a big poetry person, but I love that you keep the lines so short, just one or two words, and it's like they are given extra weight and meaning. Really loved this. Great job, and good luck!
Rita Garcia04/30/07
Enchanting! Beautifully crafted!
Jan Ackerson 04/30/07
Oh, wow! One of the most creative and fascinating pieces I've seen at this site. I savored every word.
Tabiatha Tallent04/30/07
Great job. I love your style, very interesting!
Joanne Sher 04/30/07
Just beautiful - I love this form for this writing - don't think it could have been done this well in any other form!
Brenda Welc04/30/07
This was brilliant! It was so vivid I felt like I was there! So cool. Thanks for sharing your gift of writing!
Pam Carlson-Hetland05/01/07
Very creative. This draws the reader along. Great emotion. Excellent writing.
Sara Harricharan 05/02/07
I really hope this does well! It is sweet and simple. I like the short sentences and descriptive words. And the love story 'painted' was absolutely beautiful! ^_^
Julie Arduini05/02/07
So descriptive and beautiful,I'm surprised it's in Level 2. Doubt you will be for long...excellent!
Loren T. Lowery05/03/07
Very creative and quite beautiful. Being able to capture emotions like this in so few words is remarkable. Congratulations on you EC placement.
Myrna Noyes05/03/07
CONGRATULATIONS on your EC win! This is a wonderfully creative and very well-written love story! :)
Sharlyn Guthrie05/03/07
As I was judging this week, this poem just spoke to me! I could see the entire scene unfolding, and you did it with so few words. Way to go!
Mo 05/03/07
Very creative! Congrats on your win.