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04/19/07
This was fun to read because it reminded me of my husband and me in a kayak -- our one and only time. We kept blaming each other for miss-paddling, and were real glad when it was over. Is this based on your own experience?
I think that anyone who has ever set foot in a canoe can relate to this cute story. I remember being in a canoe race with a friend and we could have won an award for the most circles completed. Nice job.
Really funny. I can see this happening. To someone else, not me!
04/24/07
I also very much enjoyed the how to book.
04/25/07
You have written a really cute story here. I love the detail throughout. From one who never dared canoe - now I am confirmed in my fear. The only suggestion I might have is to drop some of the 'he said and she said' and maybe use more action or description to tell who is talking unless really necessary - it might make it run abit more smoothly. Otherwise - great plot and good dialogue.:)