The Official Writing Challenge
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04/21/07
I like the idea that the hospital gowns are oepn at the back to relax the patients!
Some great ideas here. Take a little look at how you start your sentences. I noticed that at one stage you had three or four 'while's in short succession.
THanks for the laugh.
Cute title! I loved the humor in this article. I'm glad your wrist (not ankle) is better. Nice job.
Oh my. What an experience! I'm not sure I could laugh at it then. Mighty funny now.
04/24/07
Not bad, but somewhat repetitive: while...while... Then there's something about the language I can't seem to put my finger on, but it just didn't help my reading and comprehension.
I enjoyed your story & found it funny...have been there!
04/24/07
Favorite line in the piece, "At least that is what they told me when I woke up." Cute, I laughed out loud several times, and you kept the voice throughout. Nice job!