The Official Writing Challenge
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This one really got to me. I thought they might have made a mistake in the diagnosis. Whew.

God bless
It was certainly a surprise ending. I'm not sure I understood what happened at the end. I suspect that you needed a longer story to meet all of its potential. It was a great story but I think you can improve it by including more detail as set up.
Nice. But what happened? Couldn't he have fallen off a cliff on his own? This could definitely be more. Enjoyed it!
oh, how sad! Good writing skills here.
Difficult circumstances and story that you told well, in Jesus' Name,

Patricia