The Official Writing Challenge
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I love a story that keeps me on my feet and my heart in my throat.
I was sure the intruder had hidden somewhere no one had looked -- kept me in suspense.
Great job! I was in suspence at the mystery. Keep it up.
04/13/07
I think I'd get the apartment custodian to come up and check out the lock on that door!! :) This was a suspenseful story with a happy ending! Good job!
I enjoyed this story. Was glad it had happy ending...i was hoping it wasn't going to be a cliff hanger...this week my nerves are jangled!
04/14/07
Great story. I was interested all the way through, and you didn't disappoint--you delivered an actual ending. Thanks.
04/16/07
Excellent work, kept me on the dege of my seat all the way through. Some wonderfully evoctive images: 'An icy, cold drop of water landed on the top of her head, startling her out of her frozen panic...' Yeggy
I enjoyed your mystery. I would be like you and feel foolish, but then again, it could be real danger lurking. In Jesus' Name, Patricia
04/18/07
Wow! I don't blame her for calling 911, I would've done that right away...you did a great job with the supenseful atmosphere, especially in the end with going to check the deadbolt. Nice writing! ^_^
Nice use of suspense - well written and something we all can idenitfy with.
04/18/07
Great visuals and suspense? Yes indeed, and I loved it!
04/18/07
Great suspense and anticipation. You had my heart beating fast, that's for sure. Great mystery!
this was a great suspense story. Your descriptions of the cold set the mood very well.