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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Music (03/08/07)

TITLE: Five Nights in '45
By Myrna Noyes
03/14/07


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It was a sultry, sweaty, miserable evening in August, 1945. The young man tossed on his bed, as he tried vainly to get comfortable. Through his open window, the traffic noise three floors below blew in, instead of the desired breeze. He glanced at his clock, which showed 8:01, just as the strains of a song began in a nearby apartment. Jack recognized it as the WWII hit, “We’ll Meet Again,” and felt rising irritation that a neighbor’s music was another distraction to rob him of needed sleep. He didn’t want to be late for his new four a.m. factory job.

“I have half a mind to find out who’s playing that and tell them off,” he fumed. “Don’t they realize their window’s open and some people might be in bed already?”

He pounded his pillow in frustration, but soon the song ended, and there was no more music. Jack fell into a fitful slumber, and by morning had forgotten about the incident.

The heat wave continued, and the following night found him restlessly seeking sleep again, when suddenly he heard the same melody and sat bolt upright.

I can’t believe it! Is someone’s radio haunted?

“We’ll meet again.
Don’t know where
Don’t know when
But I know we’ll meet again some sunny day.”

Jack remembered hearing it on his Navy ship off Okinawa. He pictured his buddies and himself lying on deck to catch cool breezes while this and other war tunes played. Smiley, Bill, and J.T. grinned at him in his thoughts, and he grinned back.

Without warning he felt long-suppressed emotions rising within, and anger was uppermost. Smiley would never see another sunny day, and J.T. lost his leg the evening the kamikaze hit them. Jack raged at God for allowing Nazis, war, death, and destruction. Finally sleeping, he dreamed of J.T. mournfully holding out his severed limb while Jack covered Smiley’s dead face with his sailor cap and Bill sang in a deep, solemn voice: “Don’t know when, but I know we’ll meet again.”

In the morning, Jack awoke with a headache; and the torturous images the song conjured up stalked him all day. Anger and grief jostled for supremacy, and when night came, he fell exhausted into bed. This time he waited quietly, and as if on cue, the melody began a couple minutes after eight. “God help me,” he begged the dark, starry sky, as he lay still and listened to each word.

When it ended, he felt an unexpected glimmer of hope in the words about meeting some sunny day. Could that mean a heavenly reunion? Groans and sobs arose from the pit of his ravaged heart, and he wept out his sorrow for Smiley, J.T. himself, the world. When he finally ceased, his T-shirt was soaked with tears and his throat and eyes stung; but he sensed a healing had begun somewhere in his soul.

The fourth evening, Jack leaned out his window as soon as the familiar strains began. He was consumed with curiosity to discover why someone had to hear “We’ll Meet Again” every night. At last he determined it was coming from the apartment directly below, and went to bed satisfied.

At 7:30 the next night, Jack put on a clean shirt and made his way downstairs. He knocked, and a smiling young woman opened the door.

“I’ve come to ask about the song you play every night,” Jack stammered, suddenly nervous.

“Oh, I’m so sorry! Has it bothered you much? We didn’t mean to disturb anyone!” A wide-eyed boy of about four peeked around his mother.

“I just want to know what the song means to you and to tell you what it’s meant to me. I live above you and recently came back from serving overseas.”

The door opened wider, and she invited, “Won’t you come in for a minute? I’d like to explain.”

When they were seated, with the boy on her lap, she began: “This was the song Tommy’s daddy sang to him each night before he left for boot camp. Six months ago, he was killed. Tommy knows Daddy’s with God but misses him so, and always before bedtime prayers he has me play it to make Daddy seem closer.” She looked down at the floor.

Jack said quietly, “Now I want to share…”

An hour later, as he left the apartment thinking of the sweet little boy and his companionable, attractive mother, he found himself humming, “Don’t know when, but we’ll meet again.”


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“We’ll Meet Again” words and music by Ross Parker and Hughie Charles, 1939, public domain


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Esther Phillips03/15/07
What a sweet story. It is very well written and had me caught up with each line. The title you gave it caught my curiosity. You definitely should keep writing.
Loren T. Lowery 03/16/07
Kept me captivated the whole read - characters and circusmstances are intriguing enough to expand to a much broader level. Well done!
Loren T. Lowery 03/16/07
Had to come back and make one last comment. This piece has a potential to be ironic as an O'Henry short story. Maybe you considered this, but wouldn't it have been interesting to discover that the woman downstairs was the widow of one of his buddies. Just a thought.
Sherrie Jackson03/16/07
I really like this. I love period pieces anyway. :-) And I agree with Nathan, it would have a ton of impact if the woman was Smiley's (?) widow. Great job!
A. E. Cuthbert03/16/07
This was my favorite. It is written like it happened to you. I liked that the ending wasn't predictable because it helps it seem more real. Takes me to another time that I never experienced. Great job!
Jacquelyn Horne03/18/07
Wonderful story on emotional healing. And did I detect a little love interest here too? Good writing.
Sharlyn Guthrie 03/18/07
Nice job. You are a skilled story-teller. Music is powerful in so many ways.
Jen Davis03/19/07
I found Nathan’s comment interesting because that’s where I thought this story was headed. I also liked that it didn’t turn out as I had expected. I enjoyed it as it was but would have liked it the other way as well. A great story any way you look at it. Really good job!
Jan Ackerson 03/19/07
Love the nostalgia here, great period peice.
Laurie Glass03/19/07
Great job on this one. You're so talented. I can see this expanded into a longer, beyond the word count, piece. Very nice.
Joanney Uthe03/19/07
Great job leading us through the different emotions of your MC. You leave a lot of possibilities to the reader's imagination or for expansion.
Joanne Sher 03/20/07
Great job of getting the period down! This felt so authentic - the scene and the emotions. Nice job!
Sara Harricharan 03/21/07
This is powerful writing! I love the character of Jack, very realistic with his own ups and downs and inner struggles. The line with Groans and sobs arose from the pit of his ravaged heart was my favorite-so vivid. I especially liked the story behind the song though of why Tommy's mother played it. Cute. Great writing! ^_^
LaNaye Perkins03/21/07
Wonderfully written. You drew me in from the beginning and kept me till the end. :)
Brenda Welc03/21/07
I was really moved by your story. I often wonder what my fater went through in the Korean war, however he never speaks of it. Great story.
Pat Guy 03/21/07
You brought tears to my eyes, especially knowing the back ground. You brought his grief to life - well done.
Linda Watson Owen03/21/07
Wonderful! Now I'm hearing the sounds of the forties playing in my mind...the Tommy Dorsey orchestra etc. I love old movies and stories just like this one. So creative and skillfully written!
Mona Lisa03/23/07
You captured that era. I really had a sense of that time period. A vivid depiction of your characters kept me on the trail to read more. "Anger and grief jostled for supremacy..." Wow! This line paralyzed me. I have been there before. I believe when a writer evokes emotion from a reader, they have accomplished a wonderful goal. Nicely done.
Bonnie Derksen04/17/07
Wow! I am very impressed with your skill and excellence.
Such a heartwarming story that has reminded me of our Father's heart of healing for His kids.
Very well written. I'm too young to have lived in this era but your descriptions of sights and sounds have me right there.
Bonnie Derksen04/17/07
Wow! I am very impressed with your skill and excellence.
Such a heartwarming story that has reminded me of our Father's heart of healing for His kids.
Very well written. I'm too young to have lived in this era but your descriptions of sights and sounds have me right there.


   
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