The Official Writing Challenge
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03/16/07
I loved the unusual title of this piece--it sparked my curiosity at once!

The second paragraph here really drew me in with its colorful and specific descriptions--I could see the yellow songbook with the banjo-playing man on its front and hear the kid shouting "John Jacob..." Would like to see the story open with details like that, or maybe with some lively dialogue. This memoir has great potential and could be lengthened.


I could really relate to the narrator's intense mixed feelings upon hearing "Silent Night"--there have been certain tunes that have this exact same effect upon me. Music is indeed powerful!
03/18/07
This piece captured the incredible power in beautiful music. I was especially fascinated by the intense emotions you experienced hearing your mother play “Silent Night.” You also summed up this piece very well. One suggestion would be to eliminate the word “that” whenever possible.