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03/15/07
Thanks for your informative, yet easy to read story. I have encountered many such children, and my heart goes out to all of them and their parents. You did a great job of telling us the mother's feelings, and also demonstrating how important it is for others to extend understanding and friendship.
03/18/07
Very informative story. I was glad to see the new friend appear with help. I was not aware of such situations. Good job.
03/19/07
I loved this story! I could totally identify with it, as I have sensory defensiveness and as a child was terrified of thunderstorms, firecrackers, vacuum cleaners, cake mixers, radiators, and even popping balloons, heavy breathing, and dripping faucets! The sound of barking dogs still hurts my ears--is physically painful to me.

Great use of dialogue in this and description of the anxious mother's thoughts. I could see, hear, and feel it all happening. Thanks for sharing!
03/19/07
Well done, held my attention and informative, too. I learned something tonight.
03/19/07
My heart goes out to this narrator and her little girl! You explained something unfamiliar to most readers, and still kept it a fascinating read. Good job.
03/19/07
My heart went out to this mother and child, and I felt the mother's relief when another mother reached out to her. Thanks for sharing this very interesting story.
03/20/07
This was a facinating, well-written story that clearly demonstrated a little-known condition. You portrayed the child's unusual reaction to music and the mother's frustration very ably! Thank you for educating me!
03/21/07
An intriguing and realistic read! I am familiar with this, but not as much as you are - I appreciated being "taught" in a very engaging way - and the story was wonderful.
03/21/07
A very nice informative story. Thanks for sharing your difficulties for it did open my eyes on how we can be judgemental. Nice job.
03/22/07
Wow! I've never heard of this. Thank you for educating me in such a wonderful, informative way. Good writing touches the heart of the reader, and you certainly touched my heart.
03/22/07
Congrats! This deserved to win! ^_^
04/07/07
Wow! What an incredible way to approach the topic. Even though you chose a difficult subject matter you handled it with great skill. I am so glad I read this and learned about sensory defensiveness. Thank you. In His Name, Elizabeth
11/26/07
This is very good, Joanney! I'm glad it got the judges' attention it deserved. What a neat way to teach us a lesson (I had no clue) through the characters of your story. It's just the best way to learn, I'm fond of saying.

I'm glad I came calling to thank you for leaving a comment on my Thanks Living story. Bless the Lord for bringing us together through FaithWriters!
03/29/10
You managed to make this informative, yet easy to read, even with the challenge word limit.

Good illustration of one of the facets of autism, too. Well done.
07/07/10
Thanks for opening my eyes to something I'd never realized. Your informative story was interesting as well.
07/07/10
This very educational, as well as being a good story. I have a granddaughter who has similar problems, she can't tolerate certain textures. Tags on a top touching her neck will send her off the wall. It took a few years t discover it not a behavior problem, but a diagnosis. Life was so much better when they were able understand and find ways to meet her very real needs.