The Official Writing Challenge
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03/09/07
Great title, and good story.

Here's something to consider, if you continue to work on this story: start it with the grand opening, and tell her "back story" in a few flashbacks. Since we're limited by word count, you had to cover a lot of years, and we lost a bit of personality development.

I love the name she gave her store, and the concept behind Welcome BP!