The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/07
I really like the image of running as spending time with God. So true. Great writing as it kept my attention from beginning to end.
02/23/07
This is well written and an interesting tale BUT it veers too far from the real truth. In a sense it becomes the same snare that you write about. If this is what you intended to convey -well done. If not - beware. Either way, keep writing.
I think your writing is awesome. Keep it up!
02/24/07
Thought provoking and well written.
I'm not sure what path you meant my mind to follow, but my thoughts took the path of "what could have been" and "what Adam felt in his gut was to come". His worry over what he saw in Eve's eyes. It spun me off into my own thought patterns...



This one made me think what might have been if Eve and Adam had not eaten the fruit of that tree (the apple). I also like the title -- it is intriguing and makes the reader want to know more. It is professionally written and I could not stop until the end.

Jeanette
04/02/07
This is a very different twist on Adam and Eve. I liked how you showed his protection of her and especially the line with him telling Eve not to come back to this place, not even to get him. Sort of realistic in showing what had to be a very special relationship between them. I also liked the beginning with his running and prayer time together. Great stuff! ^_^