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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sport or Fitness (02/15/07)

TITLE: SPIDERWOMAN
By Kathleen Morris
02/17/07


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709 feet above the valley floor, shaking uncontrollably, I contemplated whether or not I really wanted to jump.

It had been a long journey so far, one that I hadn’t had much control over. Scenes of my life flashed before my eyes as I reflected on the way things could have been. If only I would have listened to them then.

I took a deep breath, inhaled all the flavours of the South African sunrise below, and wondered if heaven smelt so good. Maybe jumping could somehow set me in flight to a better place, a place without fear.

I thought of everyone back at Plettenberg Bay still sleeping, unaware of this. But it was something I had to do myself. It was a solo thing, reflective of my high-strung life. Why did I have to be such a prude?

A slight wind picked up and nearly knocked me off the platform, teetering my unprepared body. Was I ready? I didn’t know. Almost anything could happen. I could miss my target. I could panic and have a heart attack. I might just even grow wings and fly, fly all the way home.

That would be a good thing.

Suddenly, from down below I noticed him. It was my husband. He had come.

He had come to see me.

Tears streamed down my face as my whole body tingled. I wiped my cheek and sniffled, holding my head up high, determined to do this thing even more now. Would he understand when I reached the bottom? Would he know why I did it?

His inviting arms waved at me, calling out to me, trying to get me to notice. Oh, I noticed all right. I knew him well, and I knew what he wanted. I hadn’t been able to do it yesterday, but today would be my day.

Today.

“I love you!” I shouted through my chattering teeth as I prepared to leap. It was a moment in time that would prove to the world that I wasn’t a coward.

As the African sun broke through the clouds, I jumped, screaming like an awkward figure determined to surpass this obstacle.

Music throbbed in my head as I fell through the air upside down.

This is it!

I closed my eyes, surrendering to the almighty, waiting to be taken up into his saving grace.

My body trembled. Am I dead yet?

All I could hear was the roar of the wind as it blew through my ears. There was no celestial entourage for me, no waiting prize.

I reaped my own reward as I came to the end of my rope, that, and the most amazing spring I had ever encountered.

And I bounced wonderfully.

I had no wings, but somehow I was flying, somehow I had regained my composure and reached the level of confidence that I had so desperately wanted.

I cried as my husband grabbed my ankle attachment, bringing me into him, holding me tightly to his unshaven face.

He kissed me softly upside down, holding me as I dangled. It reminded me of Spiderman except I was the one with the web.

“You did it babe!” he smiled. “I never thought you’d be able to bungee jump. Sneaky girl, you made us all think you didn’t have it in you…. and here you are.”


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Esther Phillips02/22/07
I read this, firt of all, because of the unusual title. Then I got caught up in your description. I almost felt like I was going through it with you. Very well written!
Author Unknown02/22/07
loved it, well done. especially loved its setting. I chickened out of my chance to bungee over vic. falls... this made me sad for that. very well written. good job!
Mo 02/22/07
Nice. Because I was too scared to try it when I had the chance, I would've liked to have read more about the physical sensations (sights, stomach feelings, etc.), of the actual fall & subsequent bounces -- given a bigger word count of course. Good job of describing the internal thoughts of the jumper.
Joanney Uthe02/22/07
Great job keeping the reader on the edge of the seat. Well written.
Bonnie Way02/23/07
Great descriptions here - you could really feel what the woman was going through internally. I've never bungee jumped before, but you painted it well.
Jacquelyn Horne02/24/07
I'm so glad she was able to take the plunge. I could never do it, and would probably never be talked into it. Her thoughts would not have been my thoughts, but then she was brave. I'm not. Good job.
Allison Egley 02/27/07
I loved how you threw in "just enough" clues early on. Enough to make you pretty sure she's talking about bungee jumping, but few enough that you still have a lingering doubt whether she's actually attached to anything. Great job.
Joanne Sher 02/27/07
Excellent description, and just enough details to make us wonder (effectively!) what exactly she was doing. Wow.
Sara Harricharan 02/27/07
Oooh! You surprise us with the end. I almost thought she was in a parachute and then I realized that it wasn't far away enough. I liked the title of Spiderwoman-very catchy and the comparison at the end. A perfect end to a great read, I especially liked the you-are-there-atmosphere-You made me want to go bungee jumping! ^_^
Michelle Burkhardt02/27/07
Creative title. I have never bungee jumped, but it sounds exciting. Nice job.
Tabiatha Tallent02/28/07
Great descriptions. There were alot of emotions here, and I felt each one. Great job!
Kathleen Morris03/01/07
Thanks everyone for your awesome words of encouragement! I loved writing this piece and NO I have never went bungee jumping in my life. hehehe
Sara Harricharan 03/01/07
Yay! You placed! CONGRATS! ^_^
Jayne Seargeant03/01/07
Wonderful portrayal Kathy!

Like you, I have never been bungee jumping either. In my imagination I would be brave and easily take the step off the ledge. In reality I would probably require someone to get behind me and push me off of the platform.

I'm so excited for you on placing 2nd...excellent job!

Jayne :o)