The Official Writing Challenge
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My hope is that this is fiction. There were some grammatical issues but it was sadly powerful.
The writing is very vivid and so very sad. I hope this didn't really happen, but it was a powerful entry.
Sad, but compelling reading--could easily be the seeds of a novel.

You might work on closer edits of punctuation and sentence structure.

This piece is particularly good at characterization, both of the narrator and of the aunt. A strong story.