The Official Writing Challenge
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02/15/07
Very good "atmosphere" to your story, with excellent descriptions. I suspected that the ugly man might even be satan himself, and wasn't surprised he turned out to be a demon. You vividly showed how evil works a crowd! Good job!
Great descriptive words. I especially liked the pitchfork eyebrows of the ugly man. Nice job.
02/18/07
This is really good! I could just feel the anger, and see and hear the tension of the crowd. It was a real "you are there" moment--very good writing.
Excellent writing. Very vivid imagery here, and you kept us in the immediacy of the event very well. The descriptions are awesome, starting even at the first sentence. What I probably like most, though, is the historicity of it, and I feel as though you really know what you're writing about and that I can trust what you're telling me. Great job and good luck!