The Official Writing Challenge
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A sweet story. I enjoyed your descriptive language throughout. Nice job.
I love the description and imagery in this. The only thing I'd change up is making the bits of dialogue into dialogue. Otherwise I really enjoyed this. :)
Good writing. The ending (to me) could be a little more colorful.
02/14/07
I really enjoyed reading this! Beautifully vivid descriptions--I could see everything and felt as though I were there. My favorite line is probably the opening one about the mud with cow prints "squelching" around the narrator's pink-and-white runners.

The accout might be enhanced still more by including dialogue.

Loved reading about those marsmallow-eating fish!