The Official Writing Challenge
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Great story! You really show Jack's attitude at the beginning well.
What a wonderful way you have of letting the reader become a part of the scene. Great dialog, character building and what more can I say? I really enjoyed the story! Betty OVerstreet
Good story, what an eye opener for dad's. Well done.
Typical day in the (anyones) family. But, when push comes to shove, we always rally to the cause. Well done.
I really enjoyed this story! Great dialogue and interesting characters--I felt as though I were there. (I could have been the always-reading wife!) Great message, too. The unusual, colorful title also grabbed my attention!
Boy, this hits right where it hurts. I especially tuned into the part where Dad listed everything that "was the boys' fault". We (society) finds it much easier to blame someone else than take responsibility for our own actions and attitudes. Great, great lesson -- and written very well.
You did an excellent job describing Jack's feelings! Good job!!