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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Reading (01/25/07)

TITLE: Lana's Surprising Bible
By Sara Harricharan


A bible. Lana thought incredulously. Whatever prompted her crazy sister-like cousin, to give her a bible for her sweet sixteen birthday?

“She can make it or break it.” Lana muttered aloud, her birthday a week past, but the bible box, unopened. She hadn’t sent Jackie a thank-you note either. Fingering the smooth, embossed words on the front, a slight shiver ran up her arm.

Lana stared at the box for a moment before grabbing and shaking it for the cover to pop off. The top came off, the bottom half falling onto her bed.

A burgundy bible lay innocently in the box, staring up at her. Lana frowned, reaching pick it up, surprised to see a delicate silver chain hanging out from both ends like a bookmark.

Opening the bible, showed it marking a passage in Judges. She squinted at the caption. “A woman judge? What’s that about?”

The silver chain turned out to be a necklace. A thin, shimmering cross hung from one end as she read the post-it note stuck to it.

Trust me. Jackie. Her lips pursed, betraying her puzzlement. Slipping the necklace over her head, she reached for the bible, to close it.

Her fingers brushed thin, paper leaves and a right flash of rainbow blinded her.

Lana shut her eyes to block the brightness, she was falling and there was nothing she could do to stop herself and-ouch!

A moan escaped as Lana hit the ground, hard. She cautiously opened one eye, then the other. Sunlight streamed down unmercifully on herself and a dusty pathway.

She blinked. Dusty pathway? “Jackie!” The name was spoken through tightly clenched teeth as she jumped to her feet, taking in her new surroundings. A large dirt road, lush greenery and two figures coming up the road.

A tingle spread over her and Lana looked down to see her Zana-Di jeans turning into a floppy, rust colored tunic-like dress and her Reeboks into to leather sandals.

“Greetings!” A man’s voice boomed out, causing her to jump and promptly scold herself for doing so.

Lana turned uncertainly, staring openly at the ‘couple’. A young man, maybe in his late twenties and a older woman, staff in hand.

“Hi.” She managed, swallowing frantically, searching for something else to say.

“I am Barak, traveling with Deborah. Who are you?” Barak waited for his words to sink in.

All significance was lost on Lana, who twisted her hands in the oversized sleeves, her eyes darting furtively. “Lana. Look, do you know how I can get home?”

Barak’s bushy eyebrows raised slightly but he answered anyway. “Home? We are headed towards the River Kishon. You are more than welcome to accompany us.” A faint smile touched his lips. “We have already picked up a most persuasive young woman just a few miles down the road. She stopped to ah-”

“I’m right here!” An all-too-familiar voice reached Lana’s ears and she whirled around to see the speaker.

“Jackie!?” She sputtered, lurching forward to her cousin. “What’s going on here!”

Jackie’s blue eyes lit up like fireworks, her face beaming. “Lana! You made it. I was beginning to wonder.”

Barak cleared his throat. “If you both intend to accompany us, we cannot be late.” Jackie grabbed Lana’s hand, pulling her forward to catch up with Deborah, who waited up ahead.

“I can’t believe you came!” She gushed.

Lana jerked her hand back. “Came where? What kind of sick joke is this?”

Jackie rolled her eyes. “It’s not a joke. It’s real. Sort of.” She poked Lana’s chest. “It’s the necklace. It’s kind of like time travel-in biblical times-except we can’t change anything.”

“I’m in the bible!?” Lana squeaked, freezing in motion.

Jackie automatically linked her hand in the crook of Lana’s elbow. “Kinda. Took you long enough to get here. I gave you this a week ago.” She paused to look at her cousin closely. “You don’t know where you are, do you?” She said at last.

Lana shook her head slowly.

Jackie's jaw dropped. “You don’t know the story of Deborah?”

Lana shook her head again. Jackie copied the movement. “Never mind, you’re going to love it.” She broke into a run, towing Lana behind. “Trust me.”

“Right.” Lana muttered, trying to keep up, a smile tugging stubbornly at her lips. “That’s what you said the last time!”

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Donna Powers 02/02/07
This definitely made me want to read more! An interesting concept... you should definitely continue with this. She could have other adventures with the different stories of the Bible. That's what a good story does; make us want it to continue ... and that's what this does. Very nicely done.
Michelle Burkhardt02/02/07
I like the travel through the Bible concept. I am curious to see what happens. Nice job.
Julie Arduini02/02/07
Unique take on the subject, very enjoyable.
Jan Ackerson 02/03/07
This would make great adolescent literature--definitely think about expanding it.
Allison Egley 02/05/07
I agree with the others. This could be expanded into a book, which each chapter being a different Bible story. Very creative.
Jen Davis02/06/07
A very creative story. You definitely got my attention and left me wanting to know more. I usually like to come up with my own comment before I read what others have written, so I found it interesting that the word “definitely” was used several times in the comments you’ve received. I would agree that you “definitely” should expand on this. Good job!
Patty Wysong02/06/07
How fun! What happens? Does Lana come around? More, please!!
Crista Darr02/06/07
I love the idea of being literally immersed in the Bible. This piece seems unfinished though - as if the adventure is just beginning. Still, a very creative idea. Well done.
Loren T. Lowery02/07/07
You captured one of the joys of reading - total teleportation to places beyond our present reach.
Shari Armstrong 02/07/07
Love it love it love it! Very fun :)
Myrna Noyes02/07/07
This creative story has wonderful opportunities for expansion! I am left wondering how Lana does in this biblical setting. What does she learn and how does her thinking about the Scriptures change? Well done!
Joanney Uthe02/07/07
Great story. I love the take on the topic. Like many of the others, I would like to see this expanded. I could see a whole series of books from the cousins' many adventures in Bible times.
Julie Arduini02/08/07
Way to go!!! Congratulations!
Myrna Noyes02/08/07
CONGRATULATIONS to you, too! :)