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01/25/07
A lyrical allegory--lovely to read. I wondered about a few of your word choices, but nothing major. This might have been even stronger without the final paragraph--you've done a good job, trust your readers to "get it." Good writing.
01/28/07
Very nicely done (and we took simliar approaches :) )
01/28/07
I agree with Jan - you could have left off the last paragraph. This is quite beautifully done. I could definitely see this quite clearly.
A strong image of God sacrificing Himself to save mankind ! Beautiful descriptions. Job well done!
01/29/07
wonderful analagy. i have a whole apriciation fro the word
01/29/07
I have to admit that I took this literally the first time I read this, but the last paragraph made me realize what you were saying. When I read it again, I could really appreciate the allegory. Nice job and thanks for sharing!
01/30/07
The image was strong and beautiful, I really liked it. I agree about the last paragraph, but overall, the descriptions and mostly the message, were terrific!