The Official Writing Challenge
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A powerful story of true friendship, boldly and descriptively written. Your title attracted me and your opening sucked me in. I couldn't stop reading. Excellent work!
I too was attracted by the title. Once I began to read, I couldn't stop. You hold the readers attention all the way through your piece. Great work!
Wow! Here, Here. The title caught my eye and because of your great flow, I continue reading until I got to the end. I was hoping for next chapter at the hospital. You managed to capture vivid images that exploded in my mind as I envisioned Amanda and Sara and emergency personnel. Your description of the park equipment being kissed by the moonlight completing a nightmare was awesome. I really enjoyed this one. Great job.
A strong and sensitive peice.
Your gift with painting word scenes comes through loud and clear. Powerful talent you have.
I liked your last line about Sara joining in the symphony of pain. It was a gentle way of dealing with an awful issue, and the strength of your friendship shone through.