The Official Writing Challenge
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12/07/06
This is well-written--disturbing, but I think you meant it to be disturbing, so you've done what you intended!

If not for the title, I'd have been very unclear what the panel was considering. I wonder if you should make it clearer in the body of the story?

You write with a great deal of passion.