The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 687 times
Member Comments
Very nice!!! Good for this mother teaching her children about greed, and very good of her realizing her own sin as well. Well written - saw one comma out of place but very minor. Love then ending, too.
I agree. This is a good lesson for you and the kids and a wonderful thing to do. God bless you and good job on the story.
Very refreshing to see a parent being a parent. ;-)
Add a verse and this becomes a wonderful devotional.
As far as story-telling, sprinkle in a bit more description to paint the setting--to provide your readers with a vivid picture.
Good job!