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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Parent (11/16/06)

TITLE: Parent-Full Circle
By Betty Overstreet
11/19/06


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Person responsible for loving a child
Average ordinary human, no special skills
Reliable in emergencies or fun times
Extra loving when child is in need of love
Never to busy to hold, hug and kiss
Thrilled when child becomes a parent

Life is a circle from child to parent and back again.

We enter this world as a tiny screaming bit of humanity. We cry to be held, cry to be loved, cry to be fed and cry to be let go when our parent is holding us to keep us from harm.

We finally learn to do all the important things for ourselves and then suddenly, we have a tiny screaming bit of humanity wiggling in our arms. Oh my, this is my baby, I am a parent! What do I do now?

We hold the tiny bundle and croon to it of our love, then we hold it in our arms when it is unhappy, and we feed it when it is hungry. Next, as the baby grows a bit we hold it back out of the street, protect it from dangerous relationships and pray it will grow up without getting hurt to badly along the way.

Then we get a phone call from our parent telling us they need help. Age has caught up with them and they need to be held and assured we love them. One day they reach a point that they need us to feed them because they just can't manage to cook and clean anymore. As they become less able to cope with life, we have to make or find a safe place for them so they won't walk out into the street.

Our parent cares for us, we care for our child, we care for our parent and then the day will come that our baby, now an adult will receive that dreaded call from us...Honey, I don't know where I am, will you please find me, and love me and keep me safe.


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Marilee Alvey11/23/06
You have captured the circle of life and described it perfectly: the irony of it all. It's challenging, it's inspiring, and even with the word limit, it was written to perfection. What a great devotion it would be for "the sandwich generation," of which I am now a member! Thank you for a touching story!
Donna Emery11/24/06
Very nice, and very true. I enjoyed your description of the circle of parenting. Good work.
fed up11/25/06
I am not sure where this story was going much of the time. It began like an unrhyming poem, then went into fast reflection on life.
I understand what you were trying to do: paint a picture of the Circle of Life and how we progress then regress.
My suggestion is to think about being more emotionally descriptive. Take your blackand white facts and put a little color in there to warm up the scenary. It is a great idea, just needs a little work of delivering.